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Nice

I'm and anti-Twilight fan, and loved this. The animation was low, though. I think I know the videogame, but the name escapes me.

Work on it

Alright, you probably don't have a scanner, it's hard to draw on the PC, but still, try to work on quality control. It was a bit too short, and pointless, plus a bit weird. 1) Try to see if your public library or high school has a scanner. I bet you're better with drawing by hand. 2) It's better to work for a year on something good than a minute on something bad. Be your own worst critic, and review multiple times. 3) Maybe it would be better if you wrote a screen play version of this story, THEN draw it.

These are just suggestions I would take myself. I hope you do better in future submissions. Also, spelling was inconsistent. Please don't think I'm spamming.

Hmmmmm...

Well, I love this movie. The problems were what the previous person said and how it seemed-like I was on drugs a bit. Her care free personality conflicted with her rash actions and violence, or did you do that on purpose? whatever the reason may be, it was wonderful. Please continue with your amazing work.

Good

It's a nice game, but you might want to consider adding more items, like more jewelery, clothes, skin tones, ect. This is a great base, but normal girls wear dresses, long sleeves, undershirts, ect., and plus there were basic colors in there. I wear tan non-jean pants, I've worn black, white, and many colored pants. If possible, it would be cool to be able to pick the color of clothes thereby making it easier than making all sorts of items. On the jewelery, most girls have at least 1 piercing. Ears, lips, nose, stomach, ect. Maybe piercing jewelery would be better. If you are male, I understand you wouldn't want to spend to much time on girls' fashion and hadn't considered everything, That's ok. You don't have to do everything I suggest, but that would be good.

BTW, the rating I gave is kinda random since, due to PC problems, I was unable to see anything but the clothes.

Great!

All that's needed is sound. So fun! But music really would help.

*DULL ALERT*DULL ALERT*

This game is so horrible, and you my favorite author! Next time add sound, tons of blood, and exploisons. Horrible, horrible, horrible. And the enimies don't get harder, and you don't have 3 lifes! I'd only WANT 3 lifes if it was better, and have it so you don't have inf. lazers, and you have to pick up ammo-more like your Sonic Boom Cannon game. K?